The table below gives information about the average number of servings of ice cream sold each day in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below gives information about the average number of servings of ice cream sold each day in two different years. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The above table chart demonstrates the average daily sales of five different food items in two different
season
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seasons
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winter
and
summer
.
Overall
, the most significant feature is hot
coffee
recieved
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received
the highest
percentage
in
winter
,
while
iced
coffee
has the lowest score. Related to
summer
the strongest perception was related to
ice
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iced
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coffee
and the weakest
percentage
present
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presented
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soup and salad. It's noticeable that the number of hot
coffee
sharply decreased from 74 in
winter
to 30 in
summer
.
In contrast
, Iced
coffee
received
approxmately
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approximately
1
percentage
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per cent
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in
winter
then
started to increase significantly to 40 in
summer
.
Moreover
,
ice
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the ice
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cream
percentage
roughly grew from 22 in
winter
to 32 in
summer
.
However
, the number of soup show
steady
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a steady
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decline from 50 in
winter
to 22 in
summer
.
In addition
, salad in
the
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apply
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both
season
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seasons
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exhibited a similar score which is 22.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words winter, summer, coffee, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number of servings
  • compared to
  • trend
  • increase/decrease in sales
  • consistent pattern
  • seasonal variations
  • notable discrepancies
  • significant differences or similarities
  • external factors
  • consumer preferences
  • economic factors
  • notably higher or lower sales
  • promotions
  • spikes or declines
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