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The table below gives information about the average number of servings of ice cream sold each day in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below gives information about the average number of servings of ice cream sold each day in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The above table chart demonstrates the average daily sales of five different food items in two different
season
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seasons
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winter
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 and
summer
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.
Overall
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, the most significant feature is hot
coffee
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recieved
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received
 the highest
percentage
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 in
winter
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,
while
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 iced
coffee
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 has the lowest score. Related to
summer
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 the strongest perception was related to
ice
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iced
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coffee
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 and the weakest
percentage
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present
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presented
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 soup and salad. It's noticeable that the number of hot
coffee
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 sharply decreased from 74 in
winter
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 to 30 in
summer
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.
In contrast
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, Iced
coffee
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 received
approxmately
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approximately
 1
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percentage
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per cent
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 in
winter
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then
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 started to increase significantly to 40 in
summer
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.
Moreover
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,
ice
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the ice
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 cream
percentage
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 roughly grew from 22 in
winter
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 to 32 in
summer
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.
However
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, the number of soup show
steady
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a steady
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 decline from 50 in
winter
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 to 22 in
summer
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.
In addition
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, salad in
the
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apply
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both
season
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seasons
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 exhibited a similar score which is 22.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words winter, summer, coffee, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number of servings
  • compared to
  • trend
  • increase/decrease in sales
  • consistent pattern
  • seasonal variations
  • notable discrepancies
  • significant differences or similarities
  • external factors
  • consumer preferences
  • economic factors
  • notably higher or lower sales
  • promotions
  • spikes or declines
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