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The bar chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who used the Internet every day from 2003-2006.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who used the Internet every day from 2003-2006.
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The bar chart compared the five different
age
groups
 of
people
 who accessed the
internet
 on a daily basis in the
UK
 between 2003 and 2006.
It is clear that
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age
group
 in the
UK
 accounted for the highest points of the whole graph over the four-year period.
Also
, aged 25-44 and 55-64 saw the largest rises in
Internet
users
 over the same period. In 2003, the percentage of
people
 from 16-24
age
groups
 was exactly 80%, compared to precisely 50% of
people
 aged 25-44. The figures for the youngest
group
 and those aged 25-44 saw only a small increase of a full 10%. In 2006,
people
 accessing the
internet
 aged 16-24 were by far the highest in terms of
users
 in the
UK
, and the second one was the older
age
group
,
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age
group
. The proportion of
Internet
users
 gaining access from three other
age
groups
,45-54, 55-64, 65 and oversaw a relatively small rise in
users
 between 2003 and 2004 in the
UK
. In 2005, these
age
groups
 used exactly 50%, 40%, and approximately 15% respectively. In 2006, the figure for those aged 45-54 reached nearly 55%,
while
 55-to
64-years-old
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64-year-old
age
groups
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group
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users
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users'
user's
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 figures increased dramatically and the percentage of the oldest
age
group
 fluctuated slightly,
65-years-old
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65 years old
 and over.
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