Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are marrried or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others desagree. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words

As we always come across in applying for a
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, personal
questions
are questioned in many ways. Some say it is because of
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to know
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the candidates in a personal way and some say it is irrelevant as it is not needed to judge a person by personal
questions
for a
job
. I would say, it depends on case by case. In most
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the
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cases, the employers do have personal
questions
for you
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to see how well are you doing in your personal life
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to make sure you are fit for the position not
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a
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manner but
also
if you have the necessary background in performing the tasks in the work place, which
also
means of having a clear mind. Some employers, ask personal
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to get to know more about you
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to make sure that
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not only be a place to be
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but
also
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like home which you are willing to come
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a daily basis. Sometimes the candidates may feel uncomfortable sharing their personal information or of themselves to the
job
provider. They feel insecure
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sharing their personal details
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a person whom they
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know but only for the reason they provide a
job
.
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the
job
provider may judge the candidate
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a personal level rather than the skill or capability that the individual may
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required for the
job
.
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my opinion, I would say that having personal level
questions
shall be acceptable for a
job
application or an interview. The candidate should be given the right to answer it or
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from answering. The candidate should not be penalized or judged based on their personal level
questions
.
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Provide more detailed examples to illustrate your points, especially when discussing the relevance of personal information.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and that sentences within paragraphs flow logically.
task achievement
The essay introduces both sides of the argument and provides some reasoning behind each perspective.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion provides a clear personal opinion, summarizing the main points discussed.

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