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the digram below shows a bioful called ethanol is produse. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevent

#digram #bioful #ethanol #produse #summarise #information #features #comparison #relevent
The ethanol
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Ethanol
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 is a pivotal item in the biofuel production
priocess
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process
 which
have
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has
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 many benefits in our
life
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lives
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. The process
started
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starts
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 when plants and trees
growing
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grow
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 under sunlight and carbon dioxide effects.
This
guide
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guides
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 the process to the harvesting step, which
consume
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consumes
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a huge efforts
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huge efforts
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 and
need
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needs
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 many labours and
equepments
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equipment
 in order to
achive
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achieve
 the harvesting as soon as possible. Later, the harvests enter into the pre-processing
erea
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area
era
,
that
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which
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 results
at
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in
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 the end
the
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of the
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 Cellulose which
also
have
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 to be reprocessed.
As a consequence
, the processing results a sugar which
need
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needs
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 to add microbes in order to generate Ethanol that includes
of
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apply
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a
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apply
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beneficial uses in many
equebment
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industries
such
 as cars, planes, and
vechile
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vehicles
vehicle
.
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task response
Start by clearly introducing the diagram topic in your introduction to guide the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each stage in the process is logically linked to the next, using appropriate sequencing words.
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Use specific terminology accurately to reflect the technical steps in ethanol production.
coherence and cohesion
Consider adding a brief conclusion that summarizes the main processes without introducing new information.
grammar
Proofread for minor spelling and grammatical errors to enhance clarity.
task response
Your essay identifies several key stages in ethanol production, reflecting understanding of the process.
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The description provides a general overview of how ethanol can benefit vehicles, showing relevance to real-world applications.
coherence and cohesion
You have used paragraphing to organize the essay and separate ideas logically.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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