The bar chart below shows the participation in the "Melody Makers" Music Club by different age groups in three distinct years: 2011, 2015, and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of individuals who registered to become a
memeber
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member
in
a music Change preposition
of
club
named Melody Makers, classified into 5 different demographic groups
, in three years 2011, 2015 and 2020.
A glance at the graph reveals there was a downward trend in the level of participation during the given years. In addition
, 2011 recorded the most significant proportion of club
members aged 35-50 and 51-65 although
the opposite pattern was obvious in 2015. However
, this
year also
witness
a remarkable Change the form of the verb
witnessed
increase
in the club
's popularity for the 26-35 and 66+ group
.
Looking at the chart in more detail, 2011's statistic record shows that 45% of individuals Fix the agreement mistake
groups
at
all ages Change preposition
of
joining
the Wrong verb form
joined
club
, with the figures being the most noticeable for the 36-50 and 51-65 age brackets at 99% and 95% respectively. However
, the figures then
plummeted to 10% and 15% by 2015, before picking up a significant increase
to 44% and 28% in 2020. Furthermore
, in comparison with other age groups
, the 6-12 range had the lowest rate of participation at 45% in 2011, but it experienced a gradual increase
to a peak of 83% in 2020, indicating that the music club
gained the most preference from the youngest group in 2020. On the other hand
, an opposite pattern was clearly seen in the 19-25 group as the proportion of adults joining the club
dropped gradually from 81% in 2011 to 64% in 2020.
Turning to the three remaining age groups
(13-18, 26-35 and 66+), there was a similar trend in level of involvement. The rate of participants in the aformentioned
aged segment started at 67%, 73% and 54% respectively in 2011, followed by a significant Correct your spelling
aforementioned
increase
of more than 23% in 2015. Most noticeably, nearly twice as many adults aged over 66 had a memeship
of Melody Makers in 2015. Correct your spelling
membership
However
, in 2020, the club
became much less popular with the 13-18, 26-35 and 66+ groups
as there was a significant drop in the participation rates from 89%, 97% and 96% in 2015 to 39%, 33% and 35% in 2020, in the same order.Submitted by thaohuyen333 on
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