You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year old child.Write a letter to the parents .In your letter -explain why would like the job -give details why you would be a suitable person to employ -say how you spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Hello sir/madam, I hope you doing well. I wanted to reach out to you about an advertisement which I have seen in an Australian magazine about living with a family for six months and taking care of

six-year-old

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infant. My name is Ali and I recently completed my nanny course and qualified to take care of children. I am a very active and hardworking candidate and work

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without any fatigue. In 2022, I did a child aftercare job and received a positive response. I have good

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skills and am very updated with new technology. In my spare time, I will explore the nature and environment. I hope you find the ability in me to take care of your child. Looking forward to hearing from you. Thank you, Ali

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Try to elaborate more on why you would like the job, perhaps by mentioning specific interests or experiences that make this job appealing to you.

coherence cohesion

Consider using more connectors or transition words to improve the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs.

coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing are appropriately used, which is important in maintaining a formal tone in a letter.

task achievement

The tone of the letter is polite and professional, making it suitable for application to a family.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

131 words

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caregiver
childcare experience
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patience
commitment
cultural immersion
local environment
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