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The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures in the years 2005 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.

The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures in the years 2005 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.
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The table chart reveals data about the global
market
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share
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 for different mobile
brands
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 in the years 2005 and 2006.
Overall
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, it is evident from the chart that the popularity of Nokia, Motorola and Sony Ericsson rose in a
year
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,
however
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 for Samsung, LG, benQ mobile and others dropped in 2006.
To begin
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 with, the
market
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 of Nokia witnessed an increase of 2.5% as it depicts to be at 32.5% in 2005 to 35% in the following
year
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.
Likewise
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, there was a positive change of around 3% for Motorola and 1.1% for Sony Ericson, but later being the one for the least growth from 6.3% to 7.4% in a span of a
year
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, Shifting attention to other
brands
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, Samsung experienced a lower
market
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share
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 from 12.7%in 2005 to 11.8% in 2006. Both, BenQ mobile and other cellphone
brands
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 had to face a downfall of around 3% in a
year
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.
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,
L.G
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L.G.
 was the one with the least negative change in the
market
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share
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 as it projects data of 6.7% in the starting
year
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 and 6.3% in the final
year
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, facing a loss of 0.4% only. In conclusion, it can be stated that the
share
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 prices of most of the cellphone
brands
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 got
shrink
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 by the
year
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 2006.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words market, share, brands, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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