The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in China in four periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in China in four periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the
quantity
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number
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of Chinese males and females in four different periods of time where it is illustrated
wheather
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whether
they were involved in full-time or part-time study in their
further
education.
Overall
, the part-timers were dominant through the whole timeline where females were the major part-time students
at the end
of the era. Studying full-time,
however
, was not so popular at the beginning among both genders but it gradually became popular among them and the
number
grew higher
at the end
. In 1970/71, exactly a million men were doing their part-time study which experienced a downfall in 1980/81, with a
number
of more than 8 lacs which was slightly improved
at the end
of 1990/91 (more than 800
thousand
). Meanwhile, the
number
of full-timers started with less than 200
thousand
, had a gradual growth and ended with more than 2 lacs full-time students in 1990/91.
On the other hand
, less than 800
thousand
females were part-timers which crossed the 800 mark in 1980/81 and
then
had a surge of about 11 million in 1990/91. Meanwhile, full-time female students were less in
number
in 1970/71 which was nearly 100
thousand
. But the growth was immense in 1980/81 with the 200
thousand
mark which was even better with a
number
of more than 2 lacs of women receiving full-time education in 1990/91.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Further education
  • Full-time study
  • Part-time study
  • Trends
  • Participation
  • Distribution
  • Disparities
  • Proportions
  • Growth
  • Policy changes
  • Cultural shifts
  • Gender equity
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