The charts below show the percentage ofwater used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Overall
, Agriculture
is the most noticable
used in four areas which are South Correct your spelling
noticeable
America
, Africa,Central Asia
,South
East Correct word choice
and South
Asia
while
the highest usage of North America
and Europe is industry.
In North America
almost half amount
of water has been used by industrial Correct article usage
the amount
follow
by gardening at 39 per Wrong verb form
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which is 26 per cent
more than domestic. Moreover
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agriculture
at 32 per cent
also
domestic has been
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which is lower than a quarter.
In contrast
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the
first around Correct article usage
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two-third
(71per Correct your spelling
two-thirds
cent
), domestic
is in Correct word choice
and domestic
the
second Correct article usage
apply
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nearly 20 Change preposition
at
percent
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per cent
together with
industrial at the least.Furthermore
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on
agriculture
at 84 per cent
, then
domestic also
industrial at 9 and 7 per cent
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agricultural at 88 per cent
. Lastly
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