The charts below show the percentage ofwater used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage ofwater used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
given
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pie chart represents the
benefit
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benefits
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of water
been
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being
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used in six continent for different
reason
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reasons
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in per
cent
. O
Overall
,
Agriculture
is the most
noticable
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noticeable
used in four areas which are South
America
, Africa,Central
Asia
,
South
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and South
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East
Asia
while
the highest usage of North
America
and Europe is industry. In North
America
almost half
amount
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the amount
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of water has been used by industrial
follow
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followed
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by gardening at 39 per
cent
which is 26 per
cent
more than domestic.
Moreover
, Europe
use
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water for
industrial larger
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more
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than half of
the
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its
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usage, with
agriculture
at 32 per
cent
also
domestic has
been
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used nearly 10 per
cent
which is lower than a quarter.
In contrast
,South
America
use
agricultural
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agriculture
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at
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apply
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the
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first around
two-third
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two-thirds
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(71per
cent
),
domestic
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and domestic
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is in
the
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second
for
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at
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nearly 20
percent
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per cent
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together with
industrial at the least.
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Africa
spend
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the usage
in
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on
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agriculture
at 84 per
cent
,
then
domestic
also
industrial at 9 and 7 per
cent
respectively.
In
addition
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Central
Asia
has similar numbers with Africa, by
got
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getting
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the
different
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difference
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between industrial and domestic at the exactly same rate,
as well as
agricultural at 88 per
cent
.
Lastly
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South East
Asia
use
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uses
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agricultural
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agriculture
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at over 81 per
cent
make
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making
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it 6 per
cent
less than the first rank of
agriculture
,next Industrial at 12 per
cent
which is around
a
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double
of
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domestic .
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cent, agriculture, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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