The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Panama City from 2010 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in

Panama City from 2010 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
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data of the variation that took place in three different areas of misconduct in Panama City between 2010 to 2019.
Overall
, the rate of
burglarry
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burglary
was at
the
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peak in 2011 with the
number
of
cases
around 3700.
While
,
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car theft and robbery
cases
were be
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in a range nearly at 2500 and 700 respectively.
However
, burglary incidents after 2011 showed a sudden dramatic fall from 2012 to 2015 afterwards it continues with
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of
cases
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1000 till 2019.
While
, car theft
cases
was begins
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from 2700
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although
, from the
mid
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of 2012 to 2016 , the
number
of
cases
dropped to around 2000 , but
at the
end
of
this
2019
cases
came back at the beginning from where it
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to happen.
On the other hand
, robbery
cases
were remains
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at the
least
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lowest
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amongs
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among
amongst
all, from the
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nearby 700. Afterwards, the pattern was like
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till the
end
.
In
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the maximum and minimum
cases
over the period of time were around 900 in 2012 and 500 in 2015.
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the
end
,
this
was
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also
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up with the
number
of
occurrence
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as
same
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the same
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as the start.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Crime rates
  • Fluctuated
  • Significant spike
  • Consistent trend
  • Prevalent
  • Cumulative change
  • Enforcement
  • Correlate
  • Reduction/increase in crime
  • Categories of crime
  • Level of crime
  • Period of time
  • Analysis
  • Data representation
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