The line graph below shows the population size, birth rate and the death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the population size, birth rate and the death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line chart compares data about how many people lived( per million), birthed, and died in thousand in England and Wales between 1700 and 2000.
Overall
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, it was important that the number of both communities and births went up over the period of 300 years;
additionally
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, the trends of
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and
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were roughly the same.
According to
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the graph, in the beginning, the figure for population hit nearly 2 ;
then
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it increased to 10 in 1750;
however
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, it dipped to almost 4 in 1800;
thereafter
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, it leapt overwhelmingly to 50 in 2000. The diagram demonstrates that
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and
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fashions approximately were the same as each other. At the start,
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reached 30 and
death
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reported 26 after that, both of them jumped moderately to 40 for
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and just over 36 for
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in 1750;
then
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both of them stabilized until 1800;
thereafter
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, they 8 declined in 1850;
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Later their number was constant until 1900. Later they reduced somewhat to 22 for
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and 20 for
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.
Finally
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,
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climbed to just under 32;
nevertheless
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,
death
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stabilised.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "thereafter".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, death with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuations
  • stabilize
  • steep
  • advancements
  • notable
  • shift
  • norms
  • impact
  • critical factor
  • relatively stable
  • Industrial Revolution
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