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. The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

. The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The bar chart illustrates the result of the analysis of people’s drinking routine and purchasing habits of espresso and tea in different Australian cities
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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,
Brisbane
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,
Adelaide
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 and Hobart.
Overall
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, in all five countries, the highest
proportion
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 of people went to cafes to drink
coffee
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 and tea in the
last
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four
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weeks
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. The
percentage
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 of
residents
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 who bought instant
coffee
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 came to the second highest
proportion
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,
while
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 the lowest
proportion
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 of
residents
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 who only bought fresh
coffee
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 in the
last
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four
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weeks
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 . The
percentage
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 of
residents
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 who went to a
coffee
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 shop to drink espresso or tea in the
last
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four
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weeks
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 in
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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 and Hobart was the highest number compared with all others nearly 61%,64% and 63% respectively in the
last
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 month, whilst
residents
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 in
Brisbane
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 and
Adelaide
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 had the lowest
percentage
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 with 55% and 49%. The
proportion
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 of citizens consuming instant
coffee
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 was the largest in Hobart,
Adelaide
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 and
Brisbane
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 nearly 54%,50% and 53% respectively in the
last
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 30 days. Meanwhile, the consumption of instant
coffee
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 in
Melbourne
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 and
Sydney
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 had the smallest
percentage
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 with only 47% and 45% in the
last
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four
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weeks
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.
However
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,
residents
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 who consumed fresh
coffee
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 in the
last
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 month were the highest number in
Sydney
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 and
Melbourne
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 nearly 44 per
cent
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 and 43 per
cent
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 respectively,
while
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 Harbor City took the second highest number of bought fresh
coffee
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 nearly 37 per
cent
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. People from
Brisbane
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 and
Adelaide
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 had relatively the same
percentage
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 of buying fresh
coffee
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 in the
last
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 month at 34 per
cent
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sydney, melbourne, brisbane, adelaide, proportion, coffee, four, weeks, percentage, residents, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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