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The given picture reveals the water circulation procedure

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The picture illustrates the circulation of
water
 in the environment.
Overall
, the
water
 cycle has 3 main stages: evaporation and formation of
the
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clouds, precipitation to the earth, intrusion back into the ocean As the first step of the process,
water
 evaporates into the atmosphere under the heat of the sun. It is estimated that the ocean acts as the main source,
80
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%, of
water
 vapor in the air. Following, condensed
water
vapor
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 turns into clouds. After that, rainfall drops to the ground, partly forming lakes and being absorbed by soil.
Therefore
, surface runoff and
water
 in
soil
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the soil
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feeds
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 into the groundwater that flows down the impervious layer.
Final
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 stage is the intrusion of
the
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groundwater into the salty ocean
water
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task achievement
Expand on the description of the rainwater's journey after reaching the ground. Mention any other processes if shown in the diagram to provide a more detailed picture.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each step of the cycle is linked in a way that enhances the flow of your writing.
coherence cohesion
Include a conclusion to summarize the process description, even a brief one, to give a sense of completion.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides a clear sequence of steps in the water cycle, making it easier for readers to follow.
task achievement
You've done a good job in outlining the major phases of the water cycle using simple and straightforward language.

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