The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphic illustrates the gym
membership
of
male
Fix the agreement mistake
males
show examples
and
female
Fix the agreement mistake
females
show examples
between 1980 and 2010, the horizontal axis shows the
years
of the study and the vertical axis presents the quantity of
membership
for each genre. The graphic shows important facts,
such
as women's subscriptions gradually increased over the
years
after different variations, even if those variations take place every five
years
.
However
, men's subscriptions do not have a trend,
this
one presents a fluctuation that takes place every ten
years
.
In addition
, it is known that the lowest point of
membership
for women was in 1980 and the highest point was in 2005,
in contrast
, the highest point for men was in 2005, but
after
this
year, the number of subscriptions considerably fell down until the lowest mark of
this
genre, 2010. In conclusion, women's
membership
gradually rose over the
years
and men's
membership
fell down after the year 2005,
this
trend could be affected by different social and economic aspects
such
as social media and globalization.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words membership, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • membership trends
  • male and female comparison
  • notable increase/decrease
  • fluctuations
  • consistently
  • peak points
  • divergent patterns
  • parallels in trends
  • correlation
  • timeframe
  • cultural shifts
  • awareness of fitness
  • significant differences
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