The bar chart below shows the percentage e of Australian women and men in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2019. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relavent

The bar chart below shows the percentage e of Australian women and men in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2019.

Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relavent
The provided line graph illustrates the proportions of six age groups in terms of
females
and
males
in Australia doing physical activity regularly in the year 2010.
Overall
, the
numbers
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number
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of
women
doing sports between 45 and 54 remained the highest of all,
while
those of men stayed the lowest.
Also
, the figures of
women
doing physical training from all age groups climbed steadily except for
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of
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aged 65 and over. The number of
males
aged 15 to 24 doing sports stood at 53%, and that of
females
aged 15 to 24 started at 48%. The percentage of
male
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males
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from 25 to 34 doing regular physical activity fell to 42%, but that of the
females
from between 25 to 34 rose to 49%. The numbers of men and
women
at the age of 35 to 44 remained the same trend as those of 25 to 34. There was a slight increase of around 1% in the
females
at 45 to 54 doing exercise;
however
, there was a small decrease of nearly 4% in
males
practicing
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sports. The figure
of
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women
at 55 to 64 stayed at 53%,
although
that of men
inclined
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to 45%. The data of
females
at 65 and over dropped by 48, and that of
males
increased by 47%.
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