Write about the following topic: Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Having

students

study whatever they like will help them to enjoy what they do and probably succeed in the

future

. They will have all the motivation needed since they picked what they actually enjoy doing. Even going through all the hard

things

they will be

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much less pressure compared to people who were forced to do what they don't enjoy doing. Some people might think that doing

things

that are

trend

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in the

future

is the right way to make them succeed in the

future

. But in my opinion, it is not the best path to take. Since the

students

will be under more pressure than usual, they won't be enjoying the fun other

students

have

doing

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the

things

they actually like and enjoy. Even in the

future

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the

students

will be confused

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what job they should be doing. Even so, if they were to find a job they won't be motivated to do the job since it is not something that they enjoy doing.

On the other hand

, I believe that subjects related to science and technology will be the way to go. It will help us find jobs easier than usual,

due to

people needing a lot of

things

that are related to technology and science

such

as data analytics, cyber security, and more

things

that are related to those subjects. But as

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disadvantage

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students

will be able to forcefully study the

things

that they

dont

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don't

enjoy doing but as time passes when it comes to finding jobs they

wont

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be able to enjoy every moment of their life unless they decide to change what

that

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they actually like doing, Even though it is most likely not to happen. The skills and hobbies from the past will all just go to

the

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waste since they

wont

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be picking the

things

that they are actually passionate about where they would actually have the skills to do all the

things

that they like. In my opinion the

students

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should have the chance to pick their own majors. As we all can feel from our lives, when we

dont

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don't

enjoy doing something we like and we just wanna be part of the trend we are usually

gonna

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be give up at one point

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our lives. Based

from

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my past experience , I have always wanted to play basketball since I saw my sister playing basketball which looks like a lot of fun to do and

also

mainly cool. But as I tried doing it ,

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didnt

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didn't

seem to enjoy it as much as my sister do enjoy it. But as I kept on forcing and forcing myself to do it, it just

makes

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me mad which

makes

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me wanna give up

doing

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basketball. So

this

really compares to when a student does not want to study what they

dont

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don't

enjoy it will all just go to waste, since you will always feel heavy about it and there will always be thoughts on giving up on it.

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task achievement

Include more diverse viewpoints from both sides of the argument to strengthen the essay.

coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph clearly supports the main topic sentence and flows logically to the next idea.

task achievement

The essay provides a clear opinion on the topic and supports it with reasoning.

coherence cohesion

There is a logical progression of ideas, particularly in expressing the writer's opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

501 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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