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Some people feel that governments should take a large proportion of people’s salaries to pay for necessary Public services such as roads and schools. Others feel that high taxes are a bad thing Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is well known that people pay
taxes
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 for the
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country
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country's
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 necessities. Some individuals
belive
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believe
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 that authorities should receive much higher fees from citizen's pockets for better public services
such
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 as transportation and education.
However
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, the remaining are convinced that heavy
taxes
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 are a misery .
Moreover
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, it is important to have a balance between high fees and the
population
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population's
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 needs. Undoubtedly, the monthly tariffs, taken by
government
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the government
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, are essential requirements for a
country
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.
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, the authorities are responsible for people’s welfare, so they have to do everything possible to
assure
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ensure
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 a decent lifestyle.
For instance
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, the
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country
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country's
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 appearance has to be repaid in a
while
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, so, things
such
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 as roads, buildings, sanitary, and others, should be paid from people’s money , because they live there.
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, excessive
taxes
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is
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are
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 one of the worst
problem
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problems
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 a society can have.
Due to
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 its unsureness, sometimes most individuals feel like slaves
for
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to
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 the government. They pay these fees, and because of a bad
leading
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lead
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, the resources
did
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do
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 not apply
into
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to
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 the maintenance of the city, but
it
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they
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goes
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go
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 to someone else’s wallet.
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 in my
country
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has
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there has
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 been a lot of corruption and much money
was
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has been
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 stolen.
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Consequently
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Consequently,
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 the city infrastructure has not been developed for many years. In conclusion, paying high
taxes
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 does not have only
desandvantages
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disadvantages
, but
also
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 advantages. Certainly, we have to pay
taxes
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 for the
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country
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country's
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 development.
Although
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, we have to be sure of how our money is spent. To my way of thinking, bills are crucial when it comes
about
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to
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 a nation's economy. It is
clearly
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clear
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 that the citizens should contribute
for
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to
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 their own
home
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homes
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.

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task achievement
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coherence cohesion
Link your ideas more clearly with transitional words and phrases to improve cohesion.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples or evidence to support your points, perhaps with varied examples from different contexts.
introduction conclusion present
Your introduction effectively sets up the topic and clearly presents both sides of the argument.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion summarizes the main points and provides your personal opinion, which is clear and concise.
logical structure
Main points are logically structured, creating a coherent argument overall.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proportion of salary
  • Necessary public services
  • Economic growth
  • Quality of life
  • Redistributing wealth
  • Discourage
  • Motivation and productivity
  • Favorable tax conditions
  • Infringement on personal freedom
  • Balanced approach
  • Progressive tax system
  • Economic activity
  • Financial growth
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