the chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international studnets amoung univercity graduates in canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006 summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main futures and make comparisons where relevant

the chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international studnets amoung univercity graduates in canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006

summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main futures and make comparisons where relevant
The chart below gives information about the percentage change in the share of international student
graduates
in different
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universities between 2001 and 2006.
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corresponding
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to the given data we can say that the
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average percentage
of international
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students
graduatingh
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graduating
from Canadian universities in 2001 was
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approximately
5% and in 2006
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increased to almost 10%.
To begin
, in 2001 provinces
such
as New
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Brunswick
,
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Nova
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Scotia and Quebec had
highter
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higher
international
graduates
then
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other regions. As follows
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states had more
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5%
oversea
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students.
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Monitoba
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Manitoba
and Newfoundland
highter
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higher
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had nearly 5% of foreign
graduates
.
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Ontario had
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students with
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of
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approximately
3%
graduates
. As can be expected in 2006
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significantly
increased.
in other
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graduate numbers in New Brunswick and
Nora
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Scotia
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risen to over 10%. On the whole all regions had shown
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peak of international
graduates
, especially British
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with
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rapid
growth from 3% to over 10%. Taking everything into consideration in 2006
canadian
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provinces got more popular among
oversea
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students.
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New
Bruswick
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Brunswick
and Nora Scotia have maintained their place as
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demanded areas
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among
foreigners,
as well as
British
Colombi
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Columbia
had
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and had one of the highest international
graduates
in 2006.
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