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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 2980 and 2000.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 2980 and 2000.
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The pie charts illustrate the number of
electricity
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production
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 by fuel
resources
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 in
Australia
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 and
France
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 from 1980 to 2000.
Overall
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, we can see that the total
production
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 in both
Australia
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 and
France
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 witnessed a rapid increase during the period shown. Remarkably, coal material was the most popular in
Australia
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while
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 nuclear power was the most popular in
France
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 that was not produced in
Australia
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. Looking at the information in more detail, we can see that the total
electricity
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production
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 in
Australia
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 was 100
units
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 in 1980
however
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this
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figure
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 grew significantly to 170
units
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 in 2000. particularly, in 1980, there were 50
units
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 of
electricity
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 made from coal materials and 50 total
units
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 of
electricity
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 made from
oil
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, natural
gas
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, and
hydropower
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 material
however
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 in 2000, the
figure
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 for
electricity
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 produced from coal materials went up to 170
units
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, and that
figure
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 for all of
electricity
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 produced from
oil
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, natural
gas
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, and
hydropower
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 material declined to 40
units
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.
On the other hand
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, the total
electricity
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production
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 in
France
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 was 90
units
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 in 1980 but
this
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figure
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 soared significantly to 180
units
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 in 2000. To be exact , in 1980, there were only 15
units
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 of
electricity
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 made from nuclear power and 75
units
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 of
electricity
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 made from all coal,
oil
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, natural
gas
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, and
hydropower
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resources
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whereas
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 in 2000, the figures for
electricity
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 produced by nuclear power
resources
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 picked at 126
units
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.
By contrast
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, the total
figure
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 for all coal,
oil
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, natural
gas
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, and
hydropower
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resources
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 decreased to 54
units
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, production, resources, australia, france, units, figure, oil, gas, hydropower with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity production
  • Fuel source
  • Renewable sources
  • Non-renewable sources
  • Significant change
  • Evolved
  • Dominant source
  • Introduction of new sources
  • Reliance
  • Electricity production mix
  • Environmental implications
  • Future trend
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