Today more and more tourists are visiting Places where conditions Arr difficult ,such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.What are the benefit and disadvantage for tourists who visit such places?

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Nowadays, humans can travel to remote places on
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technology. It is considered by some individuals that in contemporary
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visitors going to places having harsh weather have
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scenario. On the one side, When backpackers go to the
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places on the earth than ecosystem of that place is
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human activity. Whenever people visit the unoccupied sites, they clear
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for building resorts and for making
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to travel around the area.
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human activity can disturb the natural habitat of the animals living
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, many travellers across the world travel to
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which hotels, roads,
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coherence cohesion
Try to enhance the structure by clearly dividing the essay into distinct paragraphs for introduction, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to illustrate the benefits and drawbacks discussed.
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Work on expanding your arguments with more detailed explanations and examples.
coherence cohesion
The introduction provides a clear outline of the topic that will be discussed.
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You have identified some potential disadvantages of visiting remote places.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Harsh environments
  • Adventure tourism
  • Ecosystem
  • Breathtaking landscapes
  • Remote locations
  • Cultural interaction
  • Environmental impact
  • Wildlife conservation
  • Risk and safety
  • Economic implications
  • Isolation
  • Specialized equipment
  • Climate conditions
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