IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are due to give a presentation at work at the end of this week, but you are unwell and would like to postpone the presentation. Write a letter to your manager. In the letter, Describe the presentation Explain why you cannot deliver the presentation on the scheduled day Request a different date for your presentation You do NOT need to write any addresses. write at least 150 words Begin your letter as follows: Dear...,

#minutes #presentation #work #week #unwell #manager #request #date #addresses
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Dear Manager, I'
m
Use synonyms
 writing
this
Linking Words
 email regarding
about
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
presentation
Use synonyms
 in the upcoming week. I'
m
Use synonyms
 requesting you to postpone the
presentation
Use synonyms
on
Change preposition
to
show examples
 next week. I
was
Verb problem
have
show examples
 not feeling since two days,
docter
Correct your spelling
doctor
 requested me to
take
Verb problem
apply
show examples
rest
Change preposition
for atleast
show examples
atleast
Correct your spelling
at least
 two days.
Therefore
Linking Words
 I
didnt
Correct your spelling
didn't
 get time to prepare
Use synonyms
presentation
Add an article
a presentation
the presentation
show examples
. I
was
Verb problem
did
show examples
 not
analysed
Wrong verb form
analyse
show examples
 some of the data related to our project and
need
Wrong verb form
needed
show examples
 more time to research about content.
I'
Change the verb form
I really apologize
show examples
m
Use synonyms
 really apologize for
inconvenience
Add an article
the inconvenience
show examples
 caused by me. I asked one of our team
member
Change to a plural noun
members
show examples
 to take over
this
Linking Words
presentation
Use synonyms
 meeting. Unfortunately, they don't have knowledge about our project, they might
failed
Wrong verb form
fail
show examples
 to
delivery
Replace the word
deliver
show examples
 the content to
client
Add an article
the client
show examples
, there is more chance client might
Add a missing verb
be dissatified
show examples
dissatified
Correct your spelling
dissatisfied
 about our work.
Therefore
Linking Words
, I'
m
Use synonyms
 requesting to reschedule the
presentation
Use synonyms
 for next week. I will make sure that
i
Change the capitalization
I
show examples
 will spend enough time to prepare the content and present
in
Correct pronoun usage
it in
show examples
 the meeting. I'
m
Use synonyms
 looking forward
for
Change preposition
to
show examples
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 positive response from you. Regards Dhivya Ravi
Submitted by dhivyaravi0396 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence and cohesion
Consider checking for minor grammatical errors and maintaining consistent verb tenses for a smoother read. This will enhance the clarity and coherence of your writing.
coherence and cohesion
To improve the logical structure, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, clear idea. This can help maintain a better flow throughout the letter.
task response
You have clearly addressed all parts of the task, explaining the presentation, your inability to deliver it, and requesting a new date.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is appropriate and polite, which is suitable for a formal letter to a manager.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: