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You recently ate at a local restaurant with your family and want to write to the local newspaper to tell them About the restaurant What you ate Why you would / would not recommend this restaurant

#restaurant #newspaper
Hi Team, I'm writing
this
 email to address
concern
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 about the indian local restaurant in Queen Street, Kitchener.
Last
 week, I went to
this
 restaurant with my family to celebrate my
father
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father's
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 retirement day. After many days,
i'm
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I'm
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 spending quality time with my family. As per review
in
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on
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online
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an online
the online
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 website, we have ordered an
indian
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Indian
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cuisuine
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cuisine
 (
briyani
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biryani
, goat curry) for four people.
However
, we
didnt
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didn't
 like
food
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the food
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 taste,
then
 we understood that they
are
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were
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 not
delivery
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delivering
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 quality
food
 to
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the customer
a customer
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customer
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customers
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. Some of
food
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the food
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 items
are
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staled
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, we immediately
complaint
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 to
manager
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the manager
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 about
this
 issue and left the place. I would to highlight to you because many people especially children are coming to
this
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these
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restrutant
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restaurants
 to have
food
, which might
causes
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cause
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 diseases. To be
citizen
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a citizen
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 of
nation
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the nation
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, is my
responbility
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responsibility
 to inform
about
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you about
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this
restrutant
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restaurant
 so that people
aware
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are aware
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about
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of
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this
restrutant
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restaurant
 and
careful
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be careful
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 next time after reading
news
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the news
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 in the newspaper. At the same time,
management
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the management
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 of
restrutant
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restaurant
delivery
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delivers
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 quality
food
 to
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the customer
a customer
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customer
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customers
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. Kindly
requesting
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request
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 to add
this
 information
in
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to
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 the newspaper. Thank you Regards Dhivya Ravi
Submitted by dhivyaravi0396 on

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single clear idea. This will improve the readability and coherence of your letter.
task achievement
Consider providing specific examples or suggestions for improvement. This would strengthen your arguments and give the restaurant actionable feedback.
coherence cohesion
The letter includes a clear greeting and closing, making the format professional and complete.
task achievement
Expresses a sense of responsibility towards the community, which enhances the writer's tone of concern and advocacy.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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