The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions)  of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features
the bar chart presents data on the
number
of telephone call
minutes
in Britain, over the period from 1995 to 2002.
Overall
, we observe that the local calls recorded the highest
number
of
minutes
of calling in all categories,
while
mobiles logged the lowest
number
of
minutes
, meanwhile, the national and international calls remained in between them in all categories. On the one hand, local calls started with 70
billion
minutes
in 1995 and witnessed a steady increase by approximately 7
billion
until reached their peak in 1999 by recording 90
billion
, afterward,
it
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returned to decrease by the same
number
of
minutes
till 2002 to reach 73
billion
minutes
.
On the other hand
, the national and international, and mobile calls both of them had
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onward
increasing
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over the whole period of 7 years, starting from 1995 they documented 3 and 35
billion
minutes
, respectively, till the year 2002 they documented 45 and 60
billion
, respectively. The
mobiles
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category's biggest leap was between 2000 and 2001,
while
the second category increased steadily.
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