You are planning a short visit to a city where one of your relatives lives. Write a letter to your relative. In your letter: • Explain when and how long you will be in town. • Ask whether you can stay at their home. • Offer to pay for yourself.

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Dear Reza I hope

this

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letter

find

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you well. It

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has been

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while

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since we

last

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catch

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caught

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up, and I have a program for visiting

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apply

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your city on my vacation. I booked a ticket

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for

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train

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a train

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on 25 October and I will go back

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apply

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home on 30 October. It

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would be

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very good for me if I

can

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could

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stay at your home

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this

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trip because I think we are

match

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a match

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together and we will have

fun

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a fun

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time, or I want you

help

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to help

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for booking

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book

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a good place for accommodation. I

Prefer

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stay at your home,

also

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am agree

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with all

conditions

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the conditions

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and requirements you want. Whether you are my best friend,

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apply

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I want to pay

accommodation

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the accommodation

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fee

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you. I know recently you

face

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some

difficulty

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about

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economic issues and it is good for us because we can have fun times and you can overcome

economical

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difficulties. Anyway, I do not want to ramble on too much. I will see you soon. Take care! Best regards

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Coherence and Cohesion

Pay more attention to grammatical structures and verb agreements.

Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure logical progression of ideas by connecting sentences more smoothly.

Coherence and Cohesion

The letter has a clear greeting and closing.

Task Achievement

The letter fully addresses the task requirements with details on the visit and stay.

Task Achievement

The tone is friendly and polite, which suits the context of writing to a relative.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24
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detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

171 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

anticipate
accommodation
arrive/depart
duration
itinerary
gracious hospitality
household
inconvenience
lodging
reimburse
temporary residence
travel arrangements
visit
warm welcome

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More students decided to take a part-time job when they go into universities. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?