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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The illustration depicts 3 theoretic areas to settle a fresh supermarket in the town of Pellington.
Overall
,
this
 pueblo is composed of different areas. The first
site
, A, is located in the residential zone whilst the second
area
, B,
as well as
 the third one, C, have been chosen in the countryside
area
, surrounding the
city
. The small
city
 of Pellington features a centre which is an exclusive pedestrian
area
in addition
 to a park which is stuck to the aforementioned section.
Furthermore
, Pellington
city
 contains some useful transport connectivities
such
 as a railway and a motorway, plus an airport which is located in the southern-west part of the region. A housing
area
 surrounds the
city
 centre where
,
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 the first
site
 has been chosen in
left-hand
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 top of the traffic-free zone.
Moreover
, a stretch of the countryside, which surrounds the
city
, is dedicated to industrial matters. Indeed, there are 2 industrial areas,located in the west and the south of the
city
.The
last
 is wider than the first mentioned though.
Site
 B is located in the northern-east of the countryside whilst
site
 C is settled in the southern part.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words site, area, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population density
  • foot traffic
  • residential area
  • commercial area
  • outskirts
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • commuting
  • accessible
  • proposed sites
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