The charts show the percentage of male and female workers for three employment sectors in two different countries in 2007
The four pie charts give information about male and female employers across
industry
, agriculture and services in two different countiries
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countries
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, service dominates among all people in two
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country
B , Services had taken significant
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job
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the job
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percentages
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male
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males
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females
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