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the graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the UK in 2013 and 2014 summerise the information by selecting an reporting features and mke comparisons where relevant

the graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the UK in 2013 and 2014 summerise the information by selecting an reporting features and mke comparisons where relevant
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The given bar chart provides information about female
unemployment
 rates in each country of the
Uk
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UK
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 in 2013 and 2014.
Overall
, the provided data shows that in 2013 highest female
unemployment
 proportion was detected in
England
 and the lowest in
Wales
.
On the other hand
 in 2014 highest
unemployment
rate
 among women was in Scotland and the lowest in Northern
Ireland
. On the whole, in 2013 and 2014
unemployment
 percentage of females in the UK fluctuated from 5% to 6,5%.
Furthermore
 , in 2013 Highest number of job seekers in the female population were in
England
 and Scotland, with a percentage of 6.8% and 6.1%.
In addition
, Northern
Ireland
 and
Wales
 had slightly lower
unemployment
 rates.
In particular
, Northern
Ireland
 had 5,6% and
Wales
 had a 5.4%
unemployment
rate
 among women. As follows, in 2014 Female
unemployment
rate
 fluctuation was detected in
England
, Northern
Ireland
 and
Wales
,
For example
,
England
 has shown a gentle decline to a 6.5%
rate
, in the same way,
Wales
 had a modest fall in
unemployment
rate
 to 5.0%.
Also
, Northern
Ireland
 had a marked decrease
rate
 from 5.6% to 4.6%.
On the other hand
 opposite tendency was noted in Scotland, where female job seekers' percentage increased to 6.7%.
TaKing
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Taking
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 everything into consideration, we can say that in 2013 the UK had approximately 5,5% female
unemployment
rate
, and in 2014 average proportion declined,
while
 the Scottish peaked at 6.7%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, england, wales, rate, ireland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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