The pie charts show the percentage of pop music enthusiasts according to age in 2018 and 2021. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the percentage of pop music enthusiasts according to age in 2018 and 2021.

Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The
given
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pie charts depict
the
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information about enthusiasts of pop
music
in the
years
of
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2018 and 2021. It consists of different age groups from 15 to 56 and older. Generally, it has seen quite big changes over the
years
. Taking into consideration the first chart, which is about the year 2018.
Such
type of
music
is the most popular among teenagers 15-18
years
old. It fills slightly more than the third part. The second most targeted listeners are young people from 19 to 25
years
.
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Nevertheless
, pop
music
is the least popular among 56 and older
years
,
according to
the statistics of 2018.
Additionally
, a similar table for 2021 is provided. It
is
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seen some major changes. The interest of teenagers decreased by roughly 6 per cent,
whereas
it became more popular for
the
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people from 26
years
. It could be caused by several changes in the
music
industry. Ultimately, I can definitely say, that
such
music
genre
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as pop
music
has
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have
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become much more popular among the older generation in the
last
few
years
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words music, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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