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The chart below shows the average cost of monthly contract for four different mobile (cell phones) in a European country from January to September 2002, measured in euro.

The chart below shows the average cost of monthly contract for four different mobile (cell phones) in a European country from January to September 2002, measured in euro.
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The line chart provides key information about the average cost of monthly contracts for four different mobile ( cell phones) in a European country. The units are measured in
euros
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, it is clear from the graph that Domo, had the highest rate until September.
In addition
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, Sim tx start increased until
Jun
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 showed a significant decrease
whereas
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 Alpha fluctuated until
Jun
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 increased significantly.
According to
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 what is shown, DOMO fluctuated in
jun
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 started to
increase
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 and in jul droped, LEX in Feb saw a 10 euro start
increase
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. In terms of, Sim tx from Jan to May there was
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increase
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 in cost until
Jun
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Jun
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 dropped to nearly 7
euros
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, Alpha, had the smallest rate in Jan in Apr considerably decreased in
Jun
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 had 5
euros
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then
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 started to
increase
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 to 25
euros
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 74%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words euros, jun, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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