The pie chart shows the percentage of car ownership by make in three countries in 2015. Summarize the information by select and report the main features, make comparison where relevant.

The pie chart shows the percentage of car ownership by make in three countries in 2015.

Summarize the information by select and report the main features, make comparison where relevant.
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in 2015.
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that,
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proportion of
car
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modern
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/ Africa
while
the highest
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percentage
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that Greater China and Europe both countries had more
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car
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of 2015.
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just 2% and 4%
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Africa and
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America had possession of
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the car
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. which shows, Africa and
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America's citizens.
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not fascinated towards
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the car
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analysis shows that
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by 19% ratio people had
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in
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Americed
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America
which was
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third highest country mentioned in
chart
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. Japan
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Korea
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korea
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Korea
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had 10%
ownership
of
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the car
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car
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cars
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in
year
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2015,
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where as
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Japan
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car
possession was
half
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the half
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percentage of
Korea
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Korean
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car
ownership
,South Asia had
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period
2015
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, ownership with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • car ownership
  • make
  • country
  • comparison
  • distribution
  • vehicle preferences
  • automotive market
  • popular brands
  • market share
  • dominant
  • proportion
  • trend
  • variation
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