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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These line graphs and pie charts depict data on issues in the year located in the UK. It is clear from the graphs that the highest percentage of crime shown on the graph is above 18
years
 for violent crime.
Overall
, we could say that the
smallest
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 age rate shown on the graph is in the oldest people, compared with the other citizens.
According to
 what is shown, the figure for the line graph began at nearly 7 thousand in 12
years
.
Then
, by 20
years
, it had witnessed a dramatic increase of almost 80 thousand.
While
 the number for 24
years
old
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was only 60,000,
however
, it dipped significantly in 28,
according to
 about 20000.
Then
, between 30 and 40
years
, they were nearly fluctuating under 20 thousand. Regarding the figure for type of society problem,
for
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drug and property were nearly 22% and 23%, respectively.
Afterward
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, the figure for
violent
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violence
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 started at a high of approximately 46%, but it experienced a significant decrease in public order, representing less than 10%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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