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Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in groups, while others believe that it is better for them to study alone. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #students #study #groups
Some
people
 believe that
study
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studying
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 in groups is more effective
,
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apply
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when
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while
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other
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others
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 think that
study
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studying
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 alone is better Some
people
 think
study
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studying
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 in groups is good
becouse
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because
 they can listen
other
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to other
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teammates
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teammates'
teammate's
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answer
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answers
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 or
opinion
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opinions
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.
Also
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Also,
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group
 members have interesting solutions for a lot of questions.
Therefore
 a lot of
people
 believe that when you have a
people
 for discussing something you can hear others and make decisions. Some
people
 disagree with them they think that when you
study
 in groups you will get distracted and lose
a
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apply
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focus.
However
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However,
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 you
study
 alone and no-one can't distract you. Plus the teacher will
study
 only one person and all her
focused
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focus
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 will be on you.
Owerall
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Overall
people
 who think that
study
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studying
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 in
group
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the group
a group
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 is right and when
people
 who believe
than
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that
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stady
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study
 alone
mach
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much
 better
also
 right. But
on the other
hand
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hand,
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 when you
study
 in a
group
 it will be
funny
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fun
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 and you
will wont
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won't
 come again
in
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to
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this
group
.
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again.
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organization
Ensure to have a clear introduction stating the topic and your viewpoint explicitly, and a conclusion that summarizes your main points.
development
Provide specific examples to support your reasons. For instance, you could mention how group discussions can clarify concepts or how individual focus can enhance understanding of complex topics.
clarity
Clarify the main ideas in each paragraph to ensure they directly relate to your overall argument. This will help the reader understand your perspective more clearly.
cohesion
Enhance logical connection between sentences and paragraphs. Use linking words or phrases to show the relationship between your ideas.
task fulfillment
The essay presents both perspectives on the topic, which is essential for addressing the task.
balance
Attempts to underscore the benefits of both studying in groups and alone, offering a balanced view.
organization
Includes a concluding statement, aiming to summarize the discussion.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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