The given pie chart compares the proportion of enrollment for six different courses at a UK college of education in 2010 and 2012.

The given pie chart compares the proportion of enrollment for six different courses at a UK college of education in 2010 and 2012.
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pie chart compares the proportion of
enrollment
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for six different courses at a UK college of education in 2010 and 2012.
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, immediately appeared that great change was observed in the percentage of
enrollment
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to the sports since. In the year
2010
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there was a huge demand for social studies over
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all the enrollments,
although
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still in popular course. But by 2012 it fell
one fifth
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of the total. Nursing was the second most popular course to
enroll
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but it fell drastically to half, two years later.
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Initially
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enrolment for sports science was very low at 11.9 % .
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, it increased significantly over the two years to represent the largest proportion of enrolments in 2012 at 25.5%. Less uniformity
seen
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in the remaining three courses.
Enrollment
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on
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the engineering course went up slightly to 18.5% in 2012, but psychology
virtually
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unchanged
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for carpentry, which experienced very low levels of
enrollment
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throughout the period.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words enrollment with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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