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The map below shows the plan of a proposed new town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a proposed new town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates the blueprint offered to a new
town
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, where
peolpe
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people
 will have housing,
roads
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, ring
roads
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, industry, parking, bus stand and recreational area.
Overall
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,
most
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the most
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 significant development can be seen for housing which indicates "H", there
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also
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are also
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 road rings around the
town
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 and link rodes will lead to
exit
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exits
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 and
entrance
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entrances
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. The
town
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 is surrounded by housing and two industries can be located in the northwest
as well as
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 southeast part of the
town
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. There
is
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are
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also
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 four
roads
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 which
connects
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connect
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 to the ring
roads
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, inside
of
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apply
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the ring road six
housing
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housings
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 can be seen.
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, parking found in the middle of the
town
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 which is
central
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a central
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 part of the
town
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as well as
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 at the same side bus stand are available.
Then
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, recreational
area
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areas
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 can be found inside
of
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apply
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the ring road which
located
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is located
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 middle of the south and east
part
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parts
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 of the
town
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also
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 few recreational
area
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areas
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located
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are located
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 in
outer
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the outer
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 layer of ring
roads
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 which is located in the south, where housing will be placed.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, as well as".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, roads with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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