The map below shows the plan of a proposed new town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a proposed new town.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates the blueprint offered to a new
town
, where
peolpe
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people
will have housing,
roads
, ring
roads
, industry, parking, bus stand and recreational area.
Overall
,
most
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significant development can be seen for housing which indicates "H", there
also
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are also
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road rings around the
town
and link rodes will lead to
exit
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and
entrance
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. The
town
is surrounded by housing and two industries can be located in the northwest
as well as
southeast part of the
town
. There
is
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also
four
roads
which
connects
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to the ring
roads
, inside
of
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the ring road six
housing
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housings
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can be seen.
Moreover
, parking found in the middle of the
town
which is
central
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a central
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part of the
town
as well as
at the same side bus stand are available.
Then
, recreational
area
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areas
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can be found inside
of
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the ring road which
located
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is located
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middle of the south and east
part
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of the
town
also
few recreational
area
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areas
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located
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are located
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in
outer
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the outer
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layer of ring
roads
which is located in the south, where housing will be placed.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, as well as".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, roads with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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