The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant

The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant
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bar chart shows the
proportion
of types of accommodation in the households, which are owned and rented from 1918 to 2011 in England and Wales.
Overall
, the numbers in both categories were vaguely fluctuate throughout the years and had opposite patterns,
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same
proportion
in one specific year, which was in 1971. The owned accommodation started at 20% in 1918,
then
increased dramatically until 2001 with
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percentage of 70%,
although
the number remained the same in 1939 and 1953.
However
, it began experiencing a decrease in 2011 to slightly under 70%.
Nevertheless
, it still held
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higher number rather than the rented category.
In contrast
, the rented category underwent a significant drop from 1918 to 2001, which was
initially
the largest
proportion
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those years, falling from nearly 80% to 30%. But, it rose to above 30% in 2011,
although
it was still a smaller
proportion
compared to the owned.
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