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Your office building doesn't have parking available. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: ● Explain the problem ● Suggest a solution ● Say why parking will benefit all employees

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Dear Manager, I am writing in the context
to bring
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 up
problem
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the problem
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 the people residing in your building are facing.
Firstly
, I would like to tell
that
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you that
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 I have been living
your
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on your
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 premises for more than 4 years and have not experienced any
issue
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issues
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 since
then
.
However
, as the world is changing, people are owning more vehicles and traffic is peaking charts.
Also
, the street at the back of our premises is getting congested because of everyday
Jam
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. Since I used to park my car
at
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on
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 that street now it has become very difficult to find space and park
car
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a car
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in
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such
busy
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 road. Having said that, I believe there is
a
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 urgent need to resolve
this
 issue and find a solution.
As
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this
 issue can lead to various other possible problems. One way could be to make
a
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parking for residents of the building. Though there may be some other ways to come out of it. But I ponder getting personal and restricted
spack
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space
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 for parking is
a
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 best way as it will
also
 help to ensure the safety and security of automobile of the people in your place. I hope you can understand the problem and can act in a way to help us out. Regards Simran
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coherence cohesion.single idea per paragraph
Ensure each paragraph focuses on one clear idea to enhance coherence.
task achievement.complete response
Include specific details on how the proposed solution will be implemented.
coherence cohesion.greeting and closing
The letter includes a clear greeting and closing, establishing a polite tone.
task achievement.suitable writing tone
The writing tone is suitable and respectful.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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