You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The picture provides information about two possible locations of a new shopping mall.
It is clear that
both, S1 and S2, seem to have good accessibilities because they are close to the city centre and the railway passes by them.
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Focusiong
on S1, it is situated between the centre and the housing estate, Correct your spelling
Focusing
whereas
S2 is situated around the industrial estate. In the evening, after workers get off work, there won't be many people around that area. Linking Words
However
, S1 will attract more people to the building during the whole day.
It can be seen that the distance between S1 and where people usually work is shorter than the distance between S2 and the resident area. Linking Words
Also
, there is a river running across the middle of the city. If the mall is going to be built in the second area, we can expect that the majority of the population need to cross the river and might have to drive to get there.Linking Words
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