The charts show the percentage of male and female workers in three employment sectors in two countries in 2007.

The charts show the percentage of male and female workers in three employment sectors in two countries in 2007.
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The pie chart gives information about male and female members working in three different sections in two countries in 2007.
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, it is visible that in both countries
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sector has the largest proportion of male and female workers. Looking at the details, in country A industry has 15% of male assistants,
while
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from guys the number is about 8%. In agriculture, girls put in more work than gents (43%) than
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(about 29%).
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, the
services
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part has the largest proportion of male staff members (56%), rather than female (49%).
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, in country B the smallest percentage of both sides workers was in agriculture (around 3 and 1 percentages).
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, masculines are most likely to work in the industry (32%) and
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(65%) decisions
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the
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of colleagues. At the same time, ladies
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prepare to work in
services
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piece (49% of workers). But the industry has only 11% of employees.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words services with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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