The graph below shows the percentage of the Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of the Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the percentage of the Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph presents the
proportion
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of the workforce in various industries in Australia.
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includes data from 1962 to 2012.
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, the highest percentage which shows an increasing trend is service industry. In comparison to other industries, both manufacturing and agriculture show a declining rate
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the construction and mining industries demonstrate steady states. In detail, in Australia, the highest fraction of the workforce was from the service industry. From 1962 with just above 50%, it moderately inclined to a little under 80% after more than 38 years.
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, when it reached around 2003, it levelled off to approximately 79% until 2012.
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, the workers in the manufacturing sector started with a stable
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of about a quarter in 1962,
after
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and after
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more than a decade, it went down to exactly 20%. Between 1980 and 1990, it went up similar to its
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in 1962.
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, before 2000, it declined and reached a low point of 10%. In agriculture, the percentage of workers in 1962 was roughly 11%, with a nearly 2% difference, it slowly fell after nearly 21 years. In the following years, it substantially dropped and remained constant at roughly 5% until 2012. In the construction industry, the
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of employees slowly rose from under a tenth in 1962 until prior to 2000 when it stagnated at 10% until 2012.
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, the workforce in the mining sector slightly grew from approximately 1% in 1962 to about 3% in 1970, it stayed at the same level until 2012.

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