The first graph shows the number of train passengers from 2000 to 2009. The second graph shows the percentage of trains running on time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first graph shows the number of train passengers from 2000 to 2009. The second graph shows the percentage of trains running on time.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The following graphs depict information on the
number
of train passengers
as well as
the proportion of
trains
running on time within a time period between 2000 and 2009.
Overall
, the starting
number
of train passengers on the chart was the lowest in the beginning obviously and it was the highest in 2005
whereas
trains
gained their maximum reputation in maintaining the schedule for the
last
couple of years consecutively. In the case of the users, more than 35 million people used
trains
in 2000 which had a gradual growth till 2002 and there was a sudden fall in 2003.
Then
, a rapid surge was seen and the
number
was around 45 million which was the highest in the whole timeline.
However
, the line finished with around 40 million passengers during 2009.
On the other hand
, 92% of the total
trains
were on time during 2002 which crossed the standard target of 95% by 2002.
However
, a dramatic fall occurred in 2004 and continued until a
further
increase took place in 2006 and reached the 97% mark which in fact, was the richest
number
.
Finally
, the line got a plateau and continued with a percentage of 97% for the final two years respectively.
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