The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
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The given process illustrates how to manufacture
sugar
from
sugar
cane.
Overall
, the production involves seven steps, including harvesting, crushing, and separating. It is
also
evident that manufacturing
sugar
from
sugar
cane is a capital-intensive process despite using only one ingredient. In the cultivation process,
sugar
canes take 1 to 1.5 years to grow before being ready for harvest.
This
stage could be performed in two different methods, either manually using a sickle or by an industrial reaper. Once collected, the
sugar
canes are machine-pressed to extract the juice.
This
juice is
then
passed through a filter made of limestone to remove unwanted dirt and impurities.  The next stage involves evaporation, in which the purified juice is heated to evaporate the water and thickens into a syrup.
Subsequently
, a centrifuge, which rotates at a very high speed, separates the crystals from the condensed liquid
due to
differences in density. In the final step, the
sugar
is dried and cooled, ready for packaging and sale.
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