The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar graph shows the comparison of the
number
of male and female employees in South Korea
, Canada
, and Sweden
from 2005 to 2015.
In 2005, Sweden
was the country
with the highest number
of male workers
at 79%. Not only that, the number
of female workers
was also
quite large at 45%. In addition
, South Korea
was the second country
with the largest number
of male workers
at 75%. However
, the number
of female workers
was the smallest of the three states at 30%. Moreover
, male workers
in Canada
are the smallest in number
, only 60%. On the other hand
, female workers
in Canada
had a slightly smaller difference with Sweden
at 40%.
Secondly
, employment rates in 2015 had little development in each region. The male workers
in South Korea
still have the largest number
at 80%. However
, female workers
were the smallest number
in that year by 35%. Male and female workers
in Canada
have a slight increase in numbers at 70% and 55%. Furthermore
, the male workers
in Sweden
had the same number
at 70%, and the number
of female workers
was 50% of the employees.
In conclusion, the development of the country
affects people's interest in working in each country
. South Korea
is the country
with the largest number
of stable jobs every year.Submitted by riani.the2 on
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