The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The bar graph shows the comparison of the
number
of male and female employees in South
Korea
,
Canada
, and
Sweden
from 2005 to 2015. In 2005,
Sweden
was the
country
with the highest
number
of male
workers
at 79%. Not only that, the
number
of female
workers
was
also
quite large at 45%.
In addition
, South
Korea
was the second
country
with the largest
number
of male
workers
at 75%.
However
, the
number
of female
workers
was the smallest of the three states at 30%.
Moreover
, male
workers
in
Canada
are the smallest in
number
, only 60%.
On the other hand
, female
workers
in
Canada
had a slightly smaller difference with
Sweden
at 40%.
Secondly
, employment rates in 2015 had little development in each region. The male
workers
in South
Korea
still have the largest
number
at 80%.
However
, female
workers
were the smallest
number
in that year by 35%. Male and female
workers
in
Canada
have a slight increase in numbers at 70% and 55%.
Furthermore
, the male
workers
in
Sweden
had the same
number
at 70%, and the
number
of female
workers
was 50% of the employees. In conclusion, the development of the
country
affects people's interest in working in each
country
. South
Korea
is the
country
with the largest
number
of stable jobs every year.
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