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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village lberaries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village lberaries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the number of
books
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 that were loaned in 4 distinct months June, July, August and September 2014 from 4 town libraries,
besides
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, the pie diagram gives data about the percentage of
books
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 by the kind that was borrowed until the meantime.
Overall
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, 5 types of
books
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 were in the second graph,
on the other hand
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, Sutton wood was just the fluctuated line.
According to
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 the data presented in the line graph, the topmost number of
books
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 loaned was in Sutton Wood (300),
whereas
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, the least village was West Eaton and Ryeslip (150).
Moreover
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, Church Mount was decreasing all over the months from 300 to approximately 175
books
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.
In addition
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, West Easton and Ryeslip started and finished with the same figure.
Finally
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, Sutton Wood was rising and falling,
however
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, it stopped increasing by 300
books
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. Based on the second diagram, the sorts of
books
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 were Self-help, Fiction, History, Science and Biography. the most supreme type was Science with 43%,
while
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, the fewest borrowed sort was Self-help with 10%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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