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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
given
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bar chart illustrates
infarmation
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information
 about
households
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how households
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 in the country
spend
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spent
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thier
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their
 weekly salary in
this
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the
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 period 1968
till
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to
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 2018.
Overall
, there are 8 various like food,housing,fuel and power. So, the highest one was food in 1968, but, after 50 years later
this
 type was decreasing.
Also
, there are other types which were spending weekly money for leisure in 2018 with 20-25 % and housing in the same period. But, in
this
chart
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 we can see decreasing classifications like personal goods,clothing and
foodware
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footwear
 with the lowest number.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
, other activities with the same positions in 1968 stayed in the same way.
Although
, the fuel and power had a little increasing percentage than 1968.
Hence
, as we can see, the highest one was food in 1968, but, in 2018 was leisure, and, the lowest one was fuel in 1968 and in 2018 was personal goods.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • income
  • consumer habits
  • percentage
  • cost of living
  • discretionary spending
  • inflation-adjusted
  • financial priorities
  • budget allocation
  • socioeconomic changes
  • technological advancements
  • housing and utilities
  • goods and services
  • gain insight into
  • luxuries vs. necessities
  • trend analysis
  • significant increase/decrease
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