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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village lberaries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village lberaries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
#line #books #four #months #village #lberaries #percentage #type #time #information #comparisons
The line graph illustrates the number of
books
 that people borrowed from villages namely,
West
 Eaton, Ryeslip, Sutton
wood
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 and Church Mount in four
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months in 2014.
Along with
proportion
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the proportion
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 of subjects of the
books
 which
given
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at
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in
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 the pie chart.
Overall
, at a glance
of
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at
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 the two figures, it
is appear
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 that
the
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West
 Eaton was a leader in June.
while
 the Sutton
wood
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Wood
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 got
this
 position in September.
Moreover
, it seems that
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fiction
books
 were the most popular types among the village residents
in
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during
this
 period. Let's begin by looking at the line graph, in June, the
West
 Eatonthe residents
have
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lent 300
books
that
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the highest number of
books
 in comparison to
other village
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another village
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.
Meanwile
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Meanwhile
, the Sutton wood was suited in
the
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second place with 250
and as
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followed by the Church Mount and the Ryeslip at around 50
ones
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. It is interesting,
while
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that while
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 borrowed
books
 from the
West
 Eatonthe significantly plunged by September
less
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to less
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 than 200 , the number of
book
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books
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 which individuals from other
village
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villages
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 borrowed increased in September
to
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compared with
in
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July.
Furthermore
, the pie chart provides information on the
distrubution
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distribution
 of types of
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the book
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book
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books
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 borrowed that was mentioned in the above paragraph, the most widespread subject was fiction 43%, the second most
propotion
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proportion
belong
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 to
a
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Biology
also
, by followed
with
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a
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History,
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Science and Self-help at 14%, 14% and 10% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, west with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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