The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. 

Write at least 150 words
The line graph provided demonstrates different
activites
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activities
old people do reading, hiking, theatre, watching TV and surfing the internet in their leisure time in the period of 30 years.
Overall
from the
graph
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we can notice that watching TV has always been the favourite
activity
by maintaining its place at the top except for the
last
decade it fell to be the second
activity
after being overtaken by hiking. In
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details
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we see that hiking started off at 20% in
early
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the early
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1980s and it experienced a linear increase until reaching a
percent
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per cent
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of 80% in
2010s
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the 2010s
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which has
becomes
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the highest compared to any other
activity
done by elderly people at that time. Meanwhile, surfing the internet started at a very low rate of almost 5% in
1980s
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the 1980s
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and was the least done
activity
compared to the other four until it had a dramatic increase in
2000s
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the 2000s
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words activity with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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