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Band 5.5

Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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A preference to do
same
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the same
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things
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, and avoid doing alternative options, is the first choice that some people will consider regardless of
good
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the good
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things
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 that will come with
changes
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.
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 they can specialise in the
things
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 which they have been doing for their entire
lives
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, I firmly support that
changes
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 have more possibilities to
delivery
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 better
things
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 into their
lives
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. Doing
things
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 repeatedly for a period of time will empower people's
skills
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 specifically.
Skills
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,
moreover
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, are often honed by
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the times
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times
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time
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 they have spent
on
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apply
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to recognise
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recognising
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 mistakes and eventually
rectify
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rectifying
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 all the errors.
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, I
had
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apply
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practiced
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practised
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 a piano
movement
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 to enhance how to move my wrists accurately without hurting myself in a long-term condition.
This
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 was the way to improve one of my
skills
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 where I could apply
this
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movement
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 into a whole sheet where
it
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apply
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required.
Chages
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Changes
 to new choices can be scary,
however
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,
it
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they
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 generally
provides
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provide
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 alternate ideas and perspectives which engender new practices leading to a specialist in another skill.
Refering
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Referring
 to my piano practice,
instead
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 of
practicing
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practising
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 a
movement
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 per week, I often altered
movement
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skills
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 every day repetitively in order to ensure that my wrists remembered how to move in different ways,
for instance
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.
Thus
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, reaching the
goals
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goal
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in
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of
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 improving
skills
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 accomplishment
were
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was
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 not far from possible. In my opinion, advantages can be found in any
changes
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. Wise in use,
nevertheless
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, is a major factor
on
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in
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 how
changes
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 crucially impact individuals' enhancement. In conclusion, despite the fact that some people disagree
to change
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with changing
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 what they have been doing their whole
lives
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,
alternates
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alternating
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 to
do
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doing
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 something new definitely broadens one's views to strengthen their
skills
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 if they apply them in their
lives
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 intellectually.

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task achievement
Ensure more balanced discussion by presenting equal arguments for both sides.
task achievement
Provide more specific and diverse examples to support points.
coherence cohesion
Enhance coherence by using more varied linking words and phrases.
coherence cohesion
Clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the argument.
coherence cohesion
Logical structure with paragraphs dedicated to contrasting viewpoints.
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Personal example enhances engagement and relatability.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • routine
  • comfort
  • familiarity
  • fear
  • unknown
  • resistance
  • negative consequences
  • security
  • adaptability
  • growth
  • development
  • excitement
  • experiences
  • personal
  • professional
  • resilience
  • positive outcomes
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