The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the police budget in
million
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millions
dollars
, sourced from Change preposition
of dollars
national
government, local taxes, and others Add an article
the national
such
as grants of a British area in 2017 and 2018, while
the pie charts give the
information about the expenditures of the capital in percentages, covering salaries, technology, and the combination of buildings and transport in the same years.
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apply
Overall
, the major capital for police came from national
government and taxes payers, which the former Correct article usage
the national
one
is nearly two times Correct pronoun usage
apply
of
the latterChange preposition
apply
one
. Meanwhile, police Correct pronoun usage
apply
department
spend around three fourth and nearly Fix the agreement mistake
departments
two third
of Add a hyphen
two-third
total
on wages for officers and Correct article usage
the total
staffs
in 2017 and 2018, respectively.
In 2017, Fix the agreement mistake
staff
national
government accounted for 175.5 Correct article usage
the national
million
, which is less 2.3
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than 2.3
million
than
2018. In the same period, local Change preposition
in
taxes payers
contributed 91.2 Correct your spelling
taxpayers
million
and 102.3 in 2017 and 2018, respectively.
The capital expenditures in the same two years are taken from the earning
of the authority officers and their Fix the agreement mistake
earnings
staffs
.
From 2017 to 2018, the budget spent on paying wages decreased 6 percentage points from 75% to 69%. In the same period, public facilities Fix the agreement mistake
staff
such
as buildings and transport remained on
17%, Change preposition
at
while
technology jumped from 8% to 14%, increased
by 6 percentage points.Wrong verb form
increasing
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