The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010.
Illustrated in the maps is the change that took place in the layout of the village of Stokeford between 1930 and 2010.
Distinctly,
although
the village is still identifiable, the process of urbanisation indeed exerted a great influence on its detailed look.
In 1930, we can see that an s-shaped
river crossed the area from northeast to southwest. Next to it, a Capitalize word
S-shaped
road
first crossed the river via a bridge in the north,
and Remove the comma
apply
then
kept paralleled with it till the southern end of the map. On the south of the bridge and along the road
were several houses
, among which 2 shops and a post office reside on the left and a school across. Both to the east and south of these buildings was farmland, and to the south of the school
we Add a comma
school,
can
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could
also
find a garden which contained trees and a bunch of large houses
and was connected to the main road
with a path.
80 years later, however
, while
the primary school was expanded, the farmland and shops completely disappeared to make way for 4 new branches of road
, of which one was circular and 3 were straight, with some houses
newly built along them and the main road
. Besides
, the area of garden
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the garden
reduced
and the original Add a missing verb
was reduced
houses
in the garden had been
transformed into Wrong verb form
were
a
retirement Correct article usage
apply
home
.Fix the agreement mistake
homes
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