The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the growth cycle of a salmon, a large species of fish.
Overall
, it is evident that the cycle process involves there main stages beginning in
upper
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the upper
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river
, following in the lower
river
and
lastly
living in the sea. Looking in more detail, adult salmons spawn their caviar to the reeds in the upper
river
. In
this
phase,
salman
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Salman
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eggs
stays
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there
approximately
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6
month
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before they become
a
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little baby salmon.After that, in the second stage, they moved to fast-flowing waters at the lower
river
. In
this
period, their size
grow
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between roughly 12 to 15 cm, and they live there approximately 4 years. Regarding the remaining phases, smolts settle down open sea when they become adults. At the subsequent stage, adult salmon live in the open sea
almost
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5 years, they reach about 70-76cm. In the final stage, they go back to the
river
in order to produce the eggs.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words river with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • life cycle
  • species
  • freshwater
  • marine habitat
  • larvae
  • fry
  • smolts
  • spawn
  • anadromous
  • survival rates
  • migrate/migration
  • vulnerability
  • adaptation
  • maturation
  • environmental conditions
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